|
Critical Evaluation |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
|
Overall Evaluation |
50 |
100 |
|
Appropriateness Lever |
0.6 |
1.0 |
With a title that is a cross between a Bax Symphonic Poem and the
titles of movements from Mahler’s Third Symphony, I have to admit that I
am out of sympathy with the style of this piece, not caring much for
techno or trance outside of the local disco. However the work seems well
structured and although the thematic material seems minimal, it is
nevertheless melancholic, which the composer intended. Its chief
characteristic, which is appropriate for infernos, is that it seems
relentless; otherwise I don’t really quite see the relevance to the
picture. My main criticism of this kind of piece is that however much
facility it shows for the use of hypnotic pounding rhythms, it reveals a
paucity of invention and imagination. Personally I think this composer
should break out of the straightjacket of techno-trance and try
something a bit more adventurous. I suspect he might be able to do so
quite successfully.
By: wobbie |
Score: 30 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
|
Overall Evaluation |
56 |
100 |
|
Appropriateness Lever |
0.7 |
1.0 |
This piece exhibited a good
sense of forward movement in the accompaniment. Unfortunately, the stiff
bland melody line weakened the argument. The impression was of a
journey with little or no danger - there was not enough variety.
The ending sounded as if someone had just poured a bucket of water all
over it, and it was out just like that! It was far too abrupt and the
feeling of having escaped the flames or found an oasis of safety was not
given to the audience.
By: Judge No. 1 (See Notes) |
Score: 39 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Complexity |
25 |
50 |
My main criticism is that your
piece has very little variety. It sounds the same throughout
almost all 5 1/2 minutes. I like the section starting around
2:31 the most, because it breaks the monotony a bit, but sure
enough, you return to the exact same atmosphere you had before.
The motif you've used throughout the piece gets a bit annoying
by the end, because you haven't really developed it much at all.
The complexity seems to get dense toward the end, but I can't be
sure of this without the score. The part from 5:29 on needs to
be rewritten or shortened. |
|
Orchestration |
10 |
25 |
Your orchestration needs a lot of
work. All of the instruments seem to repeat what they're doing
throughout the entire piece - you need to add more to their
parts to make the music more interesting. It would also help if
you developed the themes you have in there more - change them a
bit more, add to them. This will make your piece much better
right away. |
|
Composition |
15 |
25 |
I don't know if your idea was
minimalism, but even with minimalism you need to develop your
ideas more to make them interesting for the entire duration of
the piece. I suggest that you listen to the music of Philip
Glass, since that seems to be the sort of style you were aiming
for, perhaps with some Techno influences. |
|
Relevance |
0.8 |
1.0 |
I didn't get a very strong
feeling of a forest fire. You could have done this better, I
think. |
By: Judge No. 2 |
Score: 40 |
|
Peer Evaluation |
General
-
Complexity -
I don't
really know what the song qualifies as: Techno music or rave and
whatnot. But it has some of the same elements as those themes.
It was alright in complexity though.
         
-
Instrumentation -
The
piano was a nice effect. The snare kept the pulse of the song at a
nice tempo. However, there was a certain part near the end where it
sounded like the piano kept overlapping itself, it was a bit
annoying.
              
-
Composition -
There
was a melody at the end, where it was very recognizable. I liked
that, but afterwards, it weirded out on me. Either there was a lack
of melody, or it was being (outplayed) by the snares and effects.
              
-
Initial
Inspiration -
The effects
themselves have a nice way of presenting intensity. The piano just
(gave me a tour) through that forest. However, I do feel there
was something lacking around this area. It just doesn't feel like
you presented the picture well enough.
              
              
Specifics
-
Opening -
Nice
way to open up the song. Already, it feels quite ambient.
    
-
Middle -
The
piano is quite special in this area. It's interesting. I enjoyed the
pulsations the song gave me. Somewhat heart-throbbing.
         
-
Ending
- The piano is over-used around here. I didn't like it that much.
However there is a part when the piano plays a melody of some sort,
I thought that was interesting. However, I see there is too much
going on at the ending.
              
This song is very
unique from all the other compositions. It was enjoyable and whatnot,
but was very difficult to grade considering its level of uniqueness.
From the composer of:
Abysmal Flames |
Score: 64 |
|
From the composer of:
Affordable Wisdom |
Score: 82 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Complexity |
3 |
15 |
Ha ha,
indeed this seems to be a rather unfitting choice of a music
style for this theme, but after listening to it for a few times,
it does get more of an “interesting approach” than just an
“inappropriate approach”. Well, to get to the point, the
annoying thing of this piece was probably the endlessly
repeating chords throughout the whole thing without even one
variation. The nice thing about the piece, however, is that the
composer has been very creative in the way of creating those
“chapters”: most people use different melodies and chords to
create different moods, but this piece tries to depict those
phases not by changing the melody, but by changing everything
around it. Not a winner in my opinion, but certainly a valuable
and varying submission to this contest! |
|
Orchestration |
7 |
15 |
|
Composition |
8 |
15 |
|
Appropriateness |
12 |
20 |
|
Beginning/Start |
4 |
5 |
|
Middle/Climax |
3 |
5 |
|
Ending |
2 |
5 |
|
Overall Opinion |
13 |
20 |
|
Bonus/Malus |
+5 |
Creative approach of the
theme and creative way of changing moods |
From the composer of:
Blisters |
Score: 57 |
Finally a song that sounds different from the others. For a first
impression, it is quite good. I'm definitely okay with a composition
using fruity loops.
For this piece, started out really good. However, the piano was under
utilized. The melody or rather the motive wasn't developed at all, until
towards the end of the piece (3:50), which is the only most major
weakness of the piece i have against. More could be done to modify the
melody at the 1-4 minutes. I only hear the changing of the rhythm,
which is all. This piece would really be good if there were more
melodies used by the piano, even more so if a 2nd
instrument was added in occasionally or frequently if the orchestration
of the piece is great.
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
|
Complexity |
9 |
15 |
|
Orchestration |
8 |
15 |
|
Composition |
11 |
15 |
|
Appropriateness |
17 |
20 |
|
Beginning/Start |
5 |
5 |
|
Middle/Climax |
3 |
5 |
|
Ending |
4 |
5 |
|
Overall Opinion |
15 |
20 |
Bonus/Malus
Outstanding climax |
+4 |
From the composer of: Fate of the Forest |
Score: 76 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Complexity |
10 |
20 |
|
|
Orchestration |
16 |
20 |
|
|
Beginning |
2 |
5 |
|
|
Middle |
2 |
5 |
|
|
Ending |
2 |
5 |
|
|
Overall Composition Quality |
16 |
25 |
In spite of occasional instrument changes,
I never truly felt any change in the piece, since the beat and
harmonic backing was mercilessly unchanging all the way through.
The piece never gets "slow," it simply drops an instrument or
two. |
|
Appropriateness |
16 |
20 |
|
From the composer of:
Forest Fire: A Brief
Tone Poem for Orchestra |
Score: 64 |
|
Although such is the style of techno music, I found
this piece to be very repetitive. I found myself unintentionally zoning
out at times, which is something I never like doing (when listening to)
music. While there was some variation throughout the piece, I feel that
there wasn’t enough to pull me out of the repetitive impression I got
out of it. I think a large factor was that relentless drum beat; (I
felt more could be) done to vary the rhythm and add excitement.
The piece was fast and energetic, and I could
relate this to the nature of a forest fire. However, if I were to hear
this piece in a different context I would not think of a forest fire.
Harmonically, there is nothing that suggests to me fire or destruction.
In my opinion, something other than techno would better convey these
things.
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
|
Overall Evaluation |
75 |
100 |
|
Appropriateness Lever |
0.7 |
1.0 |
From the composer of:
Inferno |
Score: 53 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Setting |
8 |
10 |
A nice, unique take, it
creates the right mood. |
|
Composition |
4 |
10 |
Repetition is key here,
and you offer no development or other techniques found in great
compositions. It is techno music. |
|
Orchestration |
5 |
10 |
Same instruments over and
over again, and all the ones you'd find in a typical song of
this nature. |
|
Overall Score |
7 |
10 |
I kind of like techno, and
I like some things you did with this. |
From the composer of:
Music for Trumpet and
Strings |
Score: 60 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
|
Overall Evaluation |
84 |
100 |
|
Appropriateness Lever |
1.0 |
1.0 |
From the composer of:
Of Desperation,
Death, and Hope |
Score: 84 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Relevance |
8.5 |
10 |
Good job
in this aspect – another piece that really sounded as chaotic as
I’d imagine a forest fire. Good use of drums and effects, the
techno sound was really refreshing. I can’t say much as I’m not
familiar with the style, but I really do feel as if this was
quite relevant to the topic. Bravo |
|
Orchestration |
8.5 |
10 |
Well done. The drums didn’t feel stale,
and the piano lead worked well. Sometimes I wished for a little
more variance as can be found in truly top notch trance music,
but overall it was fulfilling. I could see hearing this in a
strobe-lit rave party or something, probably to your credit .
Good manipulation of fruity loops, good use of dynamic drum
parts. Overall quite good, bravo. |
|
Overall Effect |
16 |
20 |
Overall good, I felt it was a little long
and repetitive. Sometimes I wanted more variance – and I think
with a bit of work this could be achieved. I can’t say a lot.
Didn’t stick with me, but most techno music doesn’t. Good job. |
From the composer of:
Prelude for Solo
Piano |
Score: 83 |
Technical Elements [40/60]:
- Harmony:
A descending tetra chord gets old fast. You show that you understand
triads though)
- Development: Hmmmm...
the transitions / breaks from the pounding rhythmic ostinato are
welcomed changes. You definitely have a sense of continuity in this
piece as you continually add upon which you state at the beginning.
In this sense, the piece is strong. Nicely done.
- Orchestration:
Composing with synth is fun. Texturally, the ending gets a bit
mushy. I think if you took the time to work out the harmonies you
could have keep the texture busy without it colliding this much near
the end.
- Form:
Typical techno form. Starts off with the usual synth arpeggios
followed by the pounding rhythm. It works for what it is. In fact,
the beginning and end work quite well and the end really feels like
an end. That is, it is not too abrupt and it doesn’t come out of
nowhere. It’s hard to comment on this though since it is so far
outside the musical realm in which I exist.
Musicality [15/20]:
-
It’s ok as far as techno pieces go.
Relevance [14/20]:
-
I don’t smell burning, do you? Unfortunately techno music does not
have a programmatic association with a forest fire. I really don’t
think this association works.
Overall Thoughts [C+ / Satisfactory].
Granted, it was a nice change from the film music / game music, but I
really disagree that techno suits the fire theme well. From the composer of:
The Dance of the
Clumsy Bear |
Score: 69 |
|
Criterion |
Pts. |
Total |
Comments |
|
Overall Evaluation |
20 |
100 |
|
|
Appropriateness Lever |
0.5 |
1.0 |
Trance (or Techno) songs
don't match the picture, i think. |
From the composer of: The Wildfire Suite |
Score: 10 |